Winning.

The Core Media Forum
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I don’t know what to call this… It’s not really a story, it just came into my head, enjoy…

My life was filled with a lot of things. Hate, anger, fear, but never defeat, I never lost. So why is it that as soon as she walks into my life I lose? What is it about women? I mean some of ‘em are great, am I right? But some of ‘em, some of ‘em suck. But she was great, so why, why when I get somethin’ goin’, I lose. I was winnin’, winnin’ I tell ya, them some idiot shoots her. What the fuck for? A purse with five dollars in it? Bullshit.
But then it all boils down to one thing: I lost.
So that’s why I’m sittin’ in my room with a gun to my head.
I guess this is goodbye…

                         ~Marcus~
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Powerful, but it has that shortness problem that Shortcut to Suicide also had. You could always add some more angry dialogues, to help give us the entire picture. :slight_smile:

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maybe if you described what fully happened to her, like what he remembers. (the scene, the area, the people, ect.)

It’s good otherwise. :slight_smile: