Psyche

I tried to experiment a little with the sonnet form. Let me know what you think.

Psyche
The psyche tingles motionless.
Forever still, its whispered plea;
Impassioned thoughts–surcease to be,
Till I, lethargic, blankly fall.
To fall–the mere word beckons me
To act, to set my thoughts askew;
To live–to blithely be, to do,
Till psyche buckles, faints, and tears.
Of tears, my battered psyche dreams,
To vivify and calm itself.
The calm before the storm, it seems
To argue nicely–Lethe, my eyes shed!
May psyche fluctuate extremes,
And so e’er live, else deathward swoon.

That’s…slightly depressing really. However, I like it. A lot. I can’t actually find anything I’d change. Cool.

thats cool… i agree with darkness here… (used to the depression though) but yeah nothin i see that needs to be changed…

…amazing. true, it does have a slower, more depressing tone, but amazing all the same. I see nothing to be changed. almost makes me want to spend some of my time writing something instead of playing video games.