I’ve done this in school recently and have written a cover letter for my job experience class…I wrote it for the animal shelter I sometimes work at.
Ok your address should be up in the right hand corner like this:
Heavens Soldier
10 No where lane
Some city (dont include your country, that’s obvious)
123456
(Phone number here)
Skip a space
Employer’s name here
Job placement here
Job placement street here
Zip code
Phone number
Skip a space
<b>“Dear Sir and/or Madam,”</b>
-you should insert the employer’s name, or whoever you’re requesting the job interview from, right there.
<b>I am writing this letter; to apply for any and all part time jobs you may have available in your store. I wish to be a part of your staff because I have often been in your store, and I know I would enjoy working there. The reason for me wanting a part time job, with your store, is that I will soon be going to university, and I would like to get a start on earning the money for it now.</b>
Give the specific position. Since it is a store, there are many positions open to young people such as stacking shelves, cashier, working with customers, etc. And each of those gives way to many sub jobs special to their category. The way you word it suggests you are a freeloader who doesn’t really care about what he’s interested in. Also, in this paragraph, you should introduce who you are, what you’re looking for in a job, whether it’s your first, etc. You also should not state the reason why you want a job, because, it’s unecessary, and a bit immature sounding, as if you’re trying to suck up, with a good reason.
<b>I know that if you were to hire me, I would be a real asset to your team, for I am a very hard worker, and not matter what the task is I get to it with great enthusiasm. And I would not stop, until I felt that the job was up to the standard of the rest of the store, if not better.</b>
The first statement should go in your conclusion, or your last paragraph. This paragraph should state your interests and skills pertaining to the job, and why you feel youare best for a specific position, which you’ve kinda done. This should be your seller paragraph. Dont say things that “I will do things up to the store’s standards, if not better”. It sounds vainglorious, and kind of bragging and you want to sound as professional as possible.
<b>As you can see from my enclosed CV, I have already passed my GCSE’s getting 13 passes, and am currently working on my A Levels. Which gives me quite a bit of spare time, for a job. </b>
Should be included in the second paragraph. Dont give them a book to read.
<b>Being an intellectual person I believe I will bring a raised level of thinking to the table. Also, I am a very calm and relaxed person, so it would take a lot to actually get under my skin, and annoy me. Which means I can take any form of abuse that the customers (or staff) throw at me, which I believe is a very useful ability.</b>
You’re applying to a store, not the english government. The first sentence shouldn’t be there, as well as the second. They will evaluate you and think if you are a calm person if you get the job, they dont need to take your word for it. Try to keep the letter in context of the job. The last statement shouldn’t be there as well, it sounds insulting.
<b>So overall, I believe I am the right person to help you with any little things that may need doing. And I would be very grateful if you could get back to be on your decision about a job placement in your store.</b>
Again, state the specific position or field you want to work in. You need to work on your conclusion more…get rid of “grateful” and say something like, “I would appreciate your feedback on the postings of <specific job> and I feel I am the appropriate person for this type of work” End it there. And put THANK YOU right after. You always have to remember thank you.
<b>Yours faithfully"</b>
<i>Sincerely</i> darling, <i>Sincerely</i>. Professional, remember?
Then type your name, and leave your phone number underneath that. Leave enough space above your typed name so you can add your signature.
Include your CL on top of your resume.