I like how this one flows. Let me know your opinions:
Encarmine
All the colors around me are fading
I’m trying to see, but the world’s turned grey
I look in the mirror - my eyes seem to say
“There’s only one color left - it’s waiting”
I look down - they’re empty - my open hands
I’d been holding something, but I let go
I think there was color. I just don’t know
Only one color left to stain my hands
Drowning in red - there’s color in my life
It’s getting hard to breathe, but I’m still alive
I look back at the grey. I want to dive
Beneath it - drown in the color of life
I’m seeing in color. My life’s still mine
In the redness, everything spins away
I look at the redness - it seems to say
“Everything, and all the world - encarmine.”
What’s Encarmine mean? I’m thinking something to do with red. I know Incarnadine means blood-red, and it’s similar to Encarmine >>;
Really good, and you’re right, it does flow well.
You guessed right ^_^. Encarmine means “turn blood-red”, or just “blood-red”. The only difference is that encarmine doesn’t automatically mean Shakespeare.
Woah! Nice! I love how there’s no punctuation at the ends of the lines. It really gives the feeling of rambling thoughts as the person’s dying…
My favourite lines were: I want to dive / Beneath it - drown in the color of life. They just really had an impact.
It’s kinda neat how things shift to a monochrome red, signifying sensory shut down, as well as the sheer amount of blood that must be over everything.
Very haunting poem!