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Well this is my first go at a poem, written from the POV of a FF character.

[u]Hidden Within[/u]

I can feel it,
There, Inside of me,
Just waiting.

Growing,
Bulging,
Bursting,
To get out, as I fight.

I must control it,
Stop him,
From escaping.

But it is hard,
All I want,
Is to,
Sleep.

They die as I sleep,
But I can’t sleep,
I must fight,
To protect,
What I can.

But if I do,
It will be free,
The real me,
Hidden within.

------ “Vincent Valentine, FF7”

So tell me what you think. I could probably do with some pointers.

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I like it. Was the real Vincent angry?

3

I’m thinking that the one called “real me” would be Chaos, but that’s just me. Nice poem, HS :slight_smile:

4

It doesn’t rhyme too much, its very well thought out though, maybe you could make some more?, please?

5

Well Weiila managed to get it right, the “real me”, does refer to Chaos.

Yoshmeister: I never like my poems to rhyme, whenever I try, they always come out corny. And I do have other pieces that I’m working on, they will be up asap.

6

If I didn’t better, I’d think you were talking about pregnancy…

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PREGNANCY!?!?! I guess I can see your point. But, that’s not exactly the concept I was going for. Especially since Vincent is a GUY!

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I know, like I siad, I do know better, which is why I don’t think the poem is about pregnancy but rather is about Chaos, Vincent’s tranformed state. What I meant was a lot of the imagery you used was equivilent to describing what it must feel like to be pregnant.

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Yeah I know what you mean, there is a lot of that sort of imagery. Oops. Well that should be the only one with strange/misleading imagery, I hope.