A Blood Omen fanfic? OH NO!

I followed the road for another hour, until I reached another cave. There was no rain this time, only a curiosity that compelled me to investigate. I stepped inside, only to find another scroll. This spell, however, did not carry the seal of the necromancer. Cautiosly, I unfurled the scroll. It contained a series of arcane runes, with a heading that simply read “Energy Bolt.”

I pocketed the scroll and exited the cave, only to hear a low growl come from beside me. I turned, my sword raised. I then sidestepped the wolf as it pounced at me. While it tried to turn around, I sliced off its head and sampled its blood. I immediately felt sick to my stomach. Human blood seemed to be the one form of substance I could use.

I continued down the path, only to find another cave. I was more cautious this time, but I heard something calling to me from inside. “Come, Kain,” said a distant voice. “Come to us.” I entered the cave, entranced by the voices. Inside was a momentous site.

A large fountain filled the entire cave. Instead of water, however, blood flowed freely from it. The fountain itself was decorated with reliefs of human faces, twisted so that they seemed to be in eternal pain and misery.

“The blood of ages flows so sweet,” said the same voice. “Come, drink from us.”

I bowed next to the fountain and took a handful of the blood. I quickly shoved it down my throat, and felt my body begin to warm up. My muscles in particular seemed to be getting much warmer.

“Your strength has been increased,” said the voice, “for our blood enhances.” To my horror, the blood in the fountain became completely black. I did not dare to drink from it again; something was very wrong with it. I simply stood and walked out of the cave.

(to be continued)

The road stretched on, unforgivingly, for several more miles. Finally, I reached a small road sign. It pointed to the north and read, “Natchtholm.” I followed the road, until I could finally make out the small houses and buildings that made up this small town.

However, my progress was blocked. Mountains surrounded the town, while a deep river ran through the only entrance. It seemed that word of my presence had reached here, for the one bridge across the damn water was sealed by several boulders. At first, I thought of simply trying to find another road, until I saw the dark clouds coming. I had only a few hours to find shelter, and I did not want to stay inside any town for too long.

In desperation, I pushed against the boulders, and to my amazement, they began to move effortlessly. Finally, after several minutes of pushing, they were out of my way. It seemed that the voices had not lied; I was indeed more powerful than before.

“Get him!” Then again, the foolish humans did not seem to notice what had happened. Already, several armed men, probably nothing more than petty mercenaries and bodyguards, going from owner to owner, driven by greed, approached me.

“Kill the vampire!” shouted one of them. I drew my sword and met their advance. I sliced one across the chest, then gracefully slid and sliced another’s head clean in two, then removed another fool’s arms with two clean strokes, with one more to remove his torso.

The others began to falter. “What matter of demon is this?” I overheard one of them ask. Many of them finally regained their nerve and charged, only to be destroyed with a few more slices. The last one turned and ran. I raised one hand and recited the arcane spell. The man turned just as the bolt of energy ripped through his body, tearing it to small pieces.

I smiled, then feasted on what little fresh blood remained. It was not enough to satisfy me. I had to find some more. Then I spied a nearby tavern. Raising my sword, I snuck inside.

The roar of voices inside drowned out the commotion from outside, as well as my own heavy footsteps and the clink of my armor. The wenches were too busy inticing the patrons to notice me, while the men were too busy staring at the breasts of these prostitutes to care that a pale man with sharp teeth had entered their bar.

Then I felt a heavy hand on my shoulder. “Get out of here,” said a rather stiff voice. I turned, and saw the burly barkeeper staring at me. The other patrons and wenches turned their eyes towards me as well, and horror seemed to simultaniously flood over all their faces as they realized what I was.

“I will leave,” I said, “but not until my thirst is quenched.” I then grabbed the bartender and, with one mighty pull, threw him over the counter. I then bit into his neck and drained his body of blood.

The other patrons watched this in shock. Finally, they turned tail and ran, jumping out of windows and tearing through the door in an effort to escape. My thirst was gone, but I felt rather bored. I raised three of my flails, took aim at three of the fleeing men, and threw them. They went through the broken window and found each of their targets, tearing through them with ease.

I smiled, then left the tavern. I next entered the old blacksmith’s shop; it is always wise to ensure that a weapon is in its best form. The blacksmith, however, was gone. I sighed, until I noticed something below me. I bent over, and found a small red orb lying on the ground. It seemed to pulsate with a rather strange light, and I immediately thought of how strange it would be for a blacksmith to have something like this.

Then I heard the sound of a weapon being moved. I turned, and faced the blacksmith, raising a double-bladed axe. “Go to hell, vampire!” he shouted. He brought the axe down, while I dodged. In my panic, however, I had accidently thrown the orb at the man.

The minute it impacted with his body, he began to scream in pain. I saw blood rise like a fountain from his mouth, as his body seemed to shrink. However, as I looked closer, I saw that it was not shrinking; it was being crushed together. The man screamed as his head tore to pieces. The sound of bones crunching echoed in my ears. Finally, what was left of the man exploded in a gory fountain of blood.

I enjoyed the entire spectacle. I then noticed a small chest of these orbs, numbering about ten total. I packed the chest into my satchel, then left the blacksmith shop.

(to be continued)

sings “Isn’t he lovely…”
Now what if Kain and Dion met? … … on second thought, don’t answer that.

I found little of interest in the rest of Nachtolm. I fed on an elderly couple simply out of hunger; they blood was tasteless and impure. Still, I needed the strength, for the road seemed to stretch on for many miles until the next town, and I did not know if any humans were travelling at this time.

I left the town, only to feel something hit my shoulder, followed by a sharp burning sensation. I looked down, and saw a few rain drops begin to fall. I ran down the road, in search of shelter, until I saw a nearby cave. In desperation, I ducked inside. Fortunately, I had only suffered slight damage, so I would heal rather quickly.

Then I saw the contents of the cave: another large blood fountain, exactly like the previous one I had found. The fountain’s blood was still red, and stirred my hunger even more. I ran to the fountain, took a handful of the blood, and shoved it into my mouth.

Almost immediately, another warm sensation went throughout my body. I staggered back to my feet, as the blood turned black. “The rain will no longer harm you,” said the mysterious voice from before, “for our blood preserves.” I thanked whoever had designed these fountains; the previous had helped me greatly, and if this fountain worked…

I walked to the cave’s mouth. The rain was now coming down in vast droves. I stuck my arm out of the cave mouth and waited. I felt no burning, no pain, only the sensation of water hitting my hand. I cautiously stepped out, and realized that the voice was correct; I was immune to rain. However, I had a suspicion that this did not extend to all water, so I simply continued down the road.

It was a full day before I reached the next town, Steinchencroe. I shuddered at the name, for it carried nothing but terrible meanings. Nowhere in Nosgoth would you find a place more filled with scum, debauchery, and disease. I smiled deep inside at the irony; in life, I would have never graced this nightmare of a city with my presence, yet in death, I only added to the stench.

(to be continued)

Looks good. Keep up the good work.

Oh, and Weiila… You haven’t seen anything yet. :stuck_out_tongue: Just wait until Kain starts playing with a certain blade…

“<I>they</I> blood was tasteless and impure.”
Other than that, as nasty as ever.

And Manus: Aww, crap >_>

The streets were filled with whores and drunken soldiers. None dared to lay an eye on me; this was the only place where I could blend in, at least during the night. However, my hunger was great; I needed a place to feed.

Then my eyes spied a large building. A sign hanging above it read, “Red Rose Brothel.” I found myself licking my lips uncontrollably, but in a town such as this, that did not seem so strange. I passed through the entrance, only to find the desk unoccupied. Two women were escorting a man into one of the nearby rooms.

I started following them, when I heard a scream, followed by the sound of something being dropped down a long tunnel. I followed the sound, until I entered the kitchen. The man’s head, torso, and various other body parts were dumped down a long chute into a large bin. Blood covered the walls, floor, and table. A nearly-dead woman was chained to the wall, and the message “Help!” was written on one of the walls in blood. I cursed this waste of blood, then ducked into a small pantry when I heard footsteps returning.

The two women returned, accompanied by a burly man. “Okay,” said the man, “I get dibs on the heart this time. You two can have either the liver or a leg.”

“Or maybe,” I said, kicking the door open, “I’ll just make myself a meal.” I snapped one of the women’s necks, then impaled the other. The man reached for a bloody meat cleaver, but I twisted it out of his hand and brought it down on his head. I then feasted on their blood, as well as that of the chained woman. After all, one must not let a good meal go to waste.

I left the brothel and made my way to the northern exit of town. “Wait, stranger!” shouted a distant voice. I turned, and saw a man sitting in a dark alley. His eyes were glazed, his teeth were rotted, and he was stirring a large bowl filled with some green slime.

“I know what it feels like,” said the man. “I live on the outside of existance as well. But you can find others that will speak to you…if you know how to look.” I didn’t bother listening to the rest of the man’s ramblings. I simply left the city. Blood like his did not belong on my teeth.

(to be continued)

It’s nice to see a quality Blood Omen fic for once. The ones on ff.net are awful. I think this is progressing nicely. I like the way that it’s gory but not too gory if you know what I mean, and I especially like the way that you’re not trying to humanise Kain and portray him as a hero. You also have a very good grasp of grammar which helps this to read well.

I would perhaps like to see a little more description in some places, for example,

I followed the sound, until I entered the kitchen.

It’d be nice if there were some adjectives to maybe describe the path he was following, or maybe even to describe the kitchen. I know how hard this is to do, though, and I’m probably being a little harsh, so sorry. I just notice certain things like this because it’s teh exact thing that I’m trying to improve in my writing at the moment.

So, anyway, I’m really enjoying this so far. I hope there’ll be some more up soon.

Originally posted by Manus Dei
Oh, and Weiila… You haven’t seen anything yet. :stuck_out_tongue: Just wait until Kain starts playing with a certain blade…

The word you are looking for is ‘Mwahaha’. I havev’t really commented on this yet, so; keepup teh good work D. Not enough decent LoK stories out there.:cool:

I was almost done with another post…then I got pissed at something. So no update today.

Awww… okay, what needs a whipping?

I next came upon a small circle of tents, brightly colored and covered with elaborate symbols. These were obviously used by the gypsies, pervayers of lies and practicers of foolish sorceries. Whatever they said had to be taken with a grain of salt, but sometimes, they had something of use.

I snuck around the tents, steering clear of the gypsies gathered around a fire. I ducked into one of the tents, which was mercifully unoccupied. However, a small book on the ground caught my eye. Curious, I examined its contents.

It spoke of the vampires and their various forms. Much of the text was too faded to read, but it spoke of a strange ability the vampires possessed. With the proper concentration, they could disguise themselves completely as a living human, therefore allowing them to enter settlements freely. However, the disguise was flimsy, and if any violent action was taken either by or on the vampire, they would lose their concentration, and thus the spell would break.

Curious, I followed the instructions of the book and concentrated. Suddenly, I felt my body ache and moan, along with a warm sensation. Finally, it stopped, and I took a closer look at my form. My pale skin was now a dark brown, my teeth were no longer fangs, and my clothing was now rags. It seemed I had disguised myself as a mere peasant, a disgrace to someone as noble as myself, but a necessary evil.

I stepped outside and approached the gypsies. Their eyes narrowed onto me, but they did not attempt to attack me, proving that my disguise worked. “Leave here, stranger,” said one of the gypsies. “You are not welcomed here.” He pulled a knife and pointed it at me.

I walked out of the camp, until I was beyond their visible range. I then broke my own spell, returning to my vampiric form. The gypsies didn’t see me returning until it was too late.

The stretch of road continued to the town of Vasserbunde. Word of my coming had apparantly reached even this tiny town, as the buildings were sealed by large stone pillars, covered with mystical runes. Several heavily-armored guards patrolled as well, intent on protecting this village from someone…or something.

However, the thoughts of their fear of me were dashed when I looked at the nearby mountains. Sitting on top of one of the tallest peaks was a bizzare lair, carved into a misshapen skull. A waterfall poured out of its mouth into a lake far below. I now recalled what I had heard about my opponent, Nupraptor.

He was a revered mentalist and illusionist, capable of sensing the future and providing guidance. Pilgrims often journeyed to his lair to seek an audience with the fool. Now, it seemed, the mentalist had turned his thoughts to destruction, and if he was corrupted like Ariel had told me, he would enjoy the company of pilgrims no longer. Ironically, I had come seeking not his wisdom, but his life.

I approached one of the guards from behind, snapped his neck, and drank his blood. I then dismembered and consumed the other guards. I would need their strength if I was to survive the ordeal ahead. Now cruel fate had taken me to the last refuge of my enemy…Nupraptor’s Retreat.


(to be continued)

This is great. Keep up the good work.

This should be good for the next update.

Your wish is my command :kissy:

Originally posted by Weiila
Your wish is my command :kissy:

Weiila, you just made a big mistake in saying that. thinks about all the other things he could wish for

Magus stole my account! I swear! >_>

I’m not updating yet. I don’t want to get caught in mid-chapter here, and there’s no way I can finish Nupraptor’s Retreat in time for the next update (unless it takes another month…).

Chapter 4: Nupraptor’s Retreat

I searched the perimeter of the town, desperate to find an entrance to the retreat; there was none. Also, the presence of a waterfall indicated that the mountain had a large amount of water on it, so using my bat form would have been suicide.

Then I realized something about the waterfall. I eyed the spot where the water landed, which was a large lake. Carefully, I skirted along the edge, making sure not to accidently slip and fall into the acidic water. When I reached the waterfall, my suspicions were confirmed; a large cave was hidden behind the flying water.

I quickly dashed in, anxious to get as far from that accursed lake as possible. The interior of the cave was an enormous, winding passageway, covered with dust and decay from decades of neglect. The ground appeared to have once been a kind of path, most likely used by the pilgrims that journeyed here, but now it was nothing more than a disgrace to my feet. However, what really entered my mind was the strange series of sounds that seemed to be echoing from all over. The entire place stank of death.

I began to walk through the cave, but stopped when I saw something strange on the ground; a partially-hidden panel. Curiously, I grabbed a nearby rock, stood a few steps away, and threw it at the panel. The instant it touched, an enormous, blood-stained axe tore through the wall, spikes began to rise from the floor, and enormous blades ripped through the ceiling. Nupraptor seemed to enjoy his solitude, and when I thought about my curse, I could see why.

The traps did not stop; I had to plan my way through. I rolled under the axe and jumped over several spikes. When the blades came down from the ceiling, I quickly rolled out of the way, then jumped over another set of spikes and immediately ducked under another swinging axe. However, even more traps were ahead of me, but my confidence was restored when I saw how polished they were; they had obviously never been used.

I made my way through all of the traps, until I finally reached a large set of double doors. I smashed them off their hinges with one kick, and found myself in a hallway that made the cave look inviting. Blood stained the walls and floor, with tattered corpses hanging at every possible section of the ceiling. I cursed Nupraptor, not for his murderous ways, but for his waste of good blood.

As I entered the hallway, a twisted voice suddenly entered my head. “Who is this that enteres my sanctuary? Begone!” I looked around the area, but saw nothing. Then I realized who this had to be: Nupraptor himself. He could sense where I was. That meant only one thing:

I would have to be more brutal than usual.

(to be continued)

I cursed Nupraptor, not for his murderous ways, but for his waste of good blood.

I loved that line, it fits so well with Kain’s character.

And more brutal than usual? That’s not going to be pretty. Can’t wait for the next chapter.